Colours
Test Review by chiimiiHarsh Meter: Mean-Harsh >>Because my name just isn't Suzy- Title 8/10Your title, to me, seemed a little boring that wouldn't attract much people but then I realized the meaning behind it after reading the whole story. I would prefer it if you made up another title that would grab the reader’s attention when they are scanning over the stories. When a reader is quickly looking over the titles, I think they would want to read something that seem powerful and 'out there'. When they see 'colours', they would look at it and look away because the word 'colours' seem normal. I know how hard it is to come up with titles that fit you story and get the reader's attention because I wrote a few one shots and stories myself so I get why you just went with the plot and didn't think much about the reader's attention. For the future stories you make, I will consider both plot and reader, if I was you.
→My autobiography isn't written like this- Foreword & Description15/15It's short but perfectly amazing. I loved your foreword, it made me read on. I was about to just look at the story and review it later but your foreword made me read on. You used the terms 'monotonous', 'blasphemous' and 'iridescent' very well. >>How can I be known as Miss Mary-Sue- Characterization19.5/20The only fault I have with this story is that you don't have a character description, which is just a bullet point on the character in the story. It ain't that hard. You were also using first person so the reader would've found it much easier to connect with the character with there was a description. Other than that, you portrayed those characters in a different light which I found really cool. Your description of each of them was perfect. →Overratedness cannot be closer- Plot & Originality 20/20I loved the plot. I never read such plot before so it was very original and new. It flowed quiet well. There isn't much more to say because I found it quiet perfect. >>Because English is oh, the hardest to score- English Use10/10I didn't find any flaw with your grammar. It was simply perfect. Your use of vocabulary was awesome. I fell in love with you story after reading it because everything seem to click into place. Nothing was out of line. →Define the colour scheme honey- Design/Appearance10/10I didn't find a problem with the design. I liked your poster and you didn't use different awful colours. You used black throughout the story. >>Do not disturb the sleeping beauty- Entertainment Value